Peer Reviews

College Student Views On Interfaith Relationships

By: Samuel Weinblum

I felt Sam did a great job with the introduction. I really felt it was effective to use his own personal story to begin his paper. It caught my attention and made we want to keep reading.  The whole paper was very informative with a great variety of sources(great balance of statistics and writing). Also, it involves sources but is still very clear and easy to read.

The only real issues I found in Sam’s paper is just a few mechanical errors, some quotation errors, and finally change in font. All I really fixed was just block quote and the mechanical errors. Other than little grammatical errors and fixing the font to 12pt Times New Roman Sam is definitely on the right path.

Overall the paper was great  I gave the paper a 4 for  quality of information, sources, organization and I gave the paper a  3 for mechanics. This totaled to a score of 18/20. My only other suggestions would be to add some more sources into the literature review and to make some minor corrections.

The Changing Dead

By: Paige Douglass

I really found her paper to be a very interesting read. The introduction was great! I felt that the descriptive scene really helped set up the rest of the paper. Not only does it catch the reader’s attention,but also really provides the reader with some background knowledge of what funerals were like in ancient times. Overall, it is a great start to the paper.

The problems I found in the paper was some mechanical errors , re-phrasing some sections, and more transitions. In MLA formatting I do not think that  you need to include a p or pg for page number. I feel that the paper just needs some mechanical errors and just including some more transition sentences within the paragraphs.

Overall, the paper is on the right path just needs some more adjustments and more information. I gave the paper a 3 quality of information, 3 sources, 4 organization and a 2 for mechanics. This totaled 15/20.

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